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WHY WE SHOULD BE ABLE TO COOK AT SCHOOL

Dear Mr Elder,

We should have more cooking opportunities at school. Cooking is a great way to reward yellow zone learners. We would have more freedom if you let us cook.Here are three spectacular reasons why we should be able to cook at Stratford Primary School.

Firstly,

Mr Elder,

When we  grow up and leave home we need to know how to cook, so we don't stave. You don't want your students buying disgusting fatty takeaways for lunch and dinner.Do you? I hope you don't! You want us to be successful in life  don't you?

Secondly,

Mr Elder,

Don't you think being in yellow zone is obviously a privilege? So why don't you let people in yellow zone do baking. Like I said before baking is a skill for life. People who can't bring lunch to school can have some of the baking that we do. On fridays it's the end of the week and everyone's tired.Yeah? Am I right? So It wouldn't hurt to take some time out of class.

Finally,

Mr Elder,

For me personally it would be a great time to learn about all the different cuisines like French foods, Spanish foods etc.I could name lots more.Don't you want us to learn about different cultures and what they eat? For an example I love Spanish food and I also love mexican food like tacos. Indian food would be a great one for us to study.

Mr Elder,

We are your hard working students! Above I have explained the three reasons why we should be able to cook at school. Yellow zone learners should be able to cook at school, when we grow up we need to know how to cook and learning about different cultures would be amazing for me. It would be thrilling to be able to cook. It would be extremely great to do this!IT'S UP TO YOU MR ELDER!

By Amy Vickers

  

Why We Shouldn’t Have A Canteen At School

‘Ho no not the dentist again!’We should not have a canteen at school. I have three reasons why.

Firstly, I think we should not have a canteen at school because they will sell fatty foods like pies,pizza and hot chips. This encouraging kids like us to waste our own money on fatty foods. The amount of people getting more obese is amazing.

Over one year 10,000 people died because of having a heart attack which are caused by eating fatty foods.

Secondly,SUGAR IS NOT HEALTHY FOR US!At the tuck shop they will sell lollies like fruit bursts,gummies, chews etc.I've already been to the dentist four times now. I don't want to go again!The feeling of having a drill going through your tooth is revolting. This is why we don't need a canteen at school.

Thirdly, Don't you hate it when you're the one who forgot to bring their money?I do.People who can't afford to have something everyday will feel left out. This means they could be bullied by kids that can afforded it. It will get rubbed in their faces.That's not fair.Teachers will  have to sort out so many problems like bullying etc.

Finally, People who wanted a canteen said, ‘We could raise money for cancer.’ But that's not true! Because the lollies that they sell have yellow food coloring in them.Colour 102.Colour 102 has has something in it called tartrazine. This leads to cancer.It is against the law to use this in foods because it is a chemical!

I hope I have convinced you that we should not have a canteen at school.Above I have listed the reasons why...fatty foods,sugar and bullying.WE DON'T NEED A CANTEEN AT SCHOOL.This is the most unnecessary idea ever!

Dear Mum and Dad,

This war is making me petrified. I wish I could get out of this horrible place.I have seen five hundred people drown because our ship is to big to go into shore, so we have to swim with our heavy backpacks on.All I can hear is bullets going through poor people's bodies. Then five seconds after they have been shot I hear lots of deafening screams and cries saying, “Help please!” but I know that they know there is no one to help them because, we have a shortage of hard working doctors. There are no rules to this war so those Germans are shooting at us like we are little ants getting squashed.I am shivering with fear when I am writing this to you. There's practically no point in have this war because so many people are dieing. I would estimate that over 5000 people have died today. I hope I’m not one of them…

I love you.

Love from amy